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[Waylynn]

(this is a story of my character, Jason Rylek, and his past in the first Shock and Recon regiment)

"ATTEN...HUT!!" the drill sargeant screamed. "I...am Sgt. James Linul Murdo, but you will adres me as 'Sir' UNDERSTOOD?!"
"Sir, yes Sir!" we all screamed. this was my first day in the 1st Shock and Recon regiment, soon to be made an official Shock and Recon division. but i liked regiment better, sounded cooler. i was in line, front row, center column. row 1 of 10, column 5 of 10, the division Second in Charge.
number 2 out of 100, not including the Chief Warrant Officer, Grade 5, who lead the regiment.
"This base, will be your home for the next month." the Sargeant screamed. i could pull rank on him i thought im only a couple ranks below the leader of this regiment but i dident.
" Today, we will learn how to efficiantly dispatch an enemy in close combat, any comments?"
"Sir, no Sir" was the collective response. as we sprinted towars the training course, he said "LINE UP" we snapped to attention in a perfect line. "At ease" he said, we placed our left foot seperate from our right, with our hands behind our backs. "Rookie, whats ur name?" he asked me "Sir, my name is Jason Rylek, sir" he said "Rylek, get on the mat" i oblidged to his command. "Miller" he said "yes Sir" another man said "up here, NOW" "SIR, Yes sir" was Miller's response. "both of you, state your name, and occupation "Jason Rylek, Soldiar, Warrant Officer in the First Recon and Shock regiment, Sir" the other man replied "Sir, Sgt Miller, First Shock and Recon regiment, sir." "ALRIGHT" said the drill sargeant "BEGIN" he said, signaling the fight. i snapped to Dragon offensive stance, and my opponent snapped to Cat, a balanced stance for all types of fighting. he moved quickly in, i delivered a swift kick to the ribs, knocking him down, he got back up, and i delivered a Flat handed strike to the chest, knocking him back 4 feet. he got back up, and rushed, jumping an attempting a flying downward elbow, i stepped aside, and delivered a sharp knee, he hit the ground, unable to move, as i went back to Attention, the Drill Sargeant looked at me, looked at him, and said "At ease trooper, back in line"

(note: this is before my character became a cyborg)

[Waylynn]

feedback, comments? i do appreciate all opinions.

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since nobody has said anything it either means that it is terrible and ur all nice, or that it is so good ur all stunned silent. im going second