Posted 15 July 2010 - 03:10
It would be helpful if it was a medium I was actually familiar with, so I can make better suggestions, but I'll do a visual analysis anyways, going off of what I can. It looks like you got partially confused towards the area where it fades black in where you wanted your flow to go, which weakens the overall flow of the whole tag. Saturation levels are crazy over the whole tag, you go from almost black, to a wide abundance of color to oversaturated colors, to a highly saturated focal which because of the saturation looks almost black and white. I know that harsh saturation styles and rough lighting changes have been used by artists [so much that it has been coined as 'chiaroscuro' meaning sharp contrasts from light to dark, literally translates to 'light-dark' iirc; and has been extended into styles such as tenebrism] and personally these are styles that I often used and emphasised in various pieces I constructed. So it doesn't work too well in terms of directional forces keeping the eye on the focal, I wanna focus on the weird explosion like effects in the background; and in terms of colors, my eyes are going crazy due to the abrupt shifts.
Lastly, the text is too thin and pixely, though I doubt that's your fault; as I said, I don't know your media for creating the image.
Anyways, hope you can get more outta this 'editor' than this. Good luck,
Xel.